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I've been creatively blocked for a while... aside from that 4-page jam strip for T-Frags, I haven't managed to complete anything in months. Today, I finally got unstuck enough to polish off a Phantos script for an artist who's been inquiring about a collaboration.
(Five minute pause here while all the other writers in the audience throw tomatoes at me. Most writers have a terrible time finding an artist to work with, and I have all these really good people coming around asking for scripts that I can't seem to finish. Yes, I suck.)
Anyway, there's a 2-page excerpt under the cut.
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PAGE TWO
PANEL ONE
Elsewhere on the same campus. We see MEGAN FUJIYAMA, seated in a motorized wheelchair, heading towards one of the dormitory buildings. MEGAN is an Asian-American student, 19 or 20 years old, and paralyzed from the waist down. She is somewhat overweight, and dressed frumpily in a "Midland University" sweat shirt and sweat pants. She scowls fiercely, radiating contempt and bad attitude. The other students around her react uncomfortably to her presence -- some try to ignore her, others steal glances over their shoulders, others whisper to each other and point at her.
CAPTION (continuing Phantos' thought from the previous page):
"...I WONDER WHAT COULD BE THE CAUSE?"
MEGAN (thought balloon):
THAT'S RIGHT, YOU PEONS... STARE! STARE AT THE FREAK!
PANEL TWO
MEGAN rides in an elevator, along with a couple of other students (including a pretty blonde CHEERLEADER). The others look nervous and try to get as far away from MEGAN as possible in the cramped elevator car, as if afraid to touch her.
MEGAN (thought balloon):
AM I MAKING YOU NERVOUS, BARBIE-DOLL? DON'T WORRY, BEING A CRIPPLE ISN'T CONTAGIOUS!
PANEL THREE
MEGAN wheels into her cramped dorm room. There are books, magazines, clothes, and other junk scattered about.
MEGAN (thought balloon):
I HATE THIS PLACE SO VERY MUCH. AND EVERYONE IN IT. SCREW THEM ALL. I'VE GOT TO GET AWAY.
PANEL FOUR
A close-up of MEGAN as she closes her eyes and concentrates.
MEGAN (thought balloon):
LEAVE THIS WORLD... GO TO MY HAPPY PLACE...
PANEL FIVE
The scene changes to a beautiful Japanese garden, full of blossoming cherry trees and other exotic plants. There is a large pagoda nearby and mountains in the distance. In the center of the garden is a large stone fountain. Sitting on a bench by the fountain, we see a sort of idealized version of MEGAN -- slim, pretty, able-bodied, and dressed in a traditional Japanese kimono. There should be some visual cue to indicate that this scene isn't "real", but rather a sort of illusion that MEGAN is conjuring for herself on the Astral Plane. Perhaps the panel borders could be "wavy" or some other indication.
MEGAN (thought balloon):
...MY HAPPY PLACE...
PAGE THREE
PANEL ONE
The idealized MEGAN looks into the pool of the fountain, admiring her reflection.
MEGAN (thought balloon):
THAT'S MORE LIKE IT.
VOICE FROM OFF-PANEL:
MEGAN FUJIYAMA.
PANEL TWO
MEGAN turns to see TOSHIRO FUJIYAMA standing behind her. TOSHIRO is a handsome young Asian man, and like MEGAN he is dressed in traditional Japanese garb. He also has a samurai sword strapped to his belt.
MEGAN:
(GASP!) WHO ARE YOU? HOW DID YOU...?
TOSHIRO:
I AM LORD TOSHIRO FUJIYAMA. YOUR ANCESTOR, MANY GENERATIONS REMOVED.
PANEL THREE
TOSHIRO sits down next to MEGAN, placing his hand on hers. He's totally flirting with her.
TOSHIRO:
YOU ARE MORE POWERFUL THAN YOU KNOW, MEGAN. YOUR POWER -- AND YOUR ANGER -- HAVE DRAWN MY SPIRIT TO YOU.
MEGAN:
I DON'T UNDERSTAND.
PANEL THREE
TOSHIRO cups MEGAN'S face in his hands.
TOSHIRO:
IN MY TIME, I WAS A POWERFUL WARLORD. BUT LIKE YOU, I WAS UNDERMINED BY PETTY MINDS AND JEALOUS FOOLS. BUT NOW, TOGETHER, WE CAN ACHIEVE WHAT WE BOTH DESIRE.
PANEL FOUR
MEGAN'S face twists into an angry snarl.
MEGAN:
REVENGE!
PANEL FIVE
TOSHIRO leans in to kiss MEGAN. Their lips aren't quite touching yet.
TOSHIRO:
THEN JOIN YOUR POWER TO MINE, MEGAN... AND WE SHALL MAKE THEM PAY.
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I dunno, some aspects of this story may end up being controversial... not sure how people will react to the handicapped character. But otherwise, it's my usual Silver Age-y adventure yarn. Is it any good? Beats me. But it's DONE. Woo!
(Five minute pause here while all the other writers in the audience throw tomatoes at me. Most writers have a terrible time finding an artist to work with, and I have all these really good people coming around asking for scripts that I can't seem to finish. Yes, I suck.)
Anyway, there's a 2-page excerpt under the cut.
--
PAGE TWO
PANEL ONE
Elsewhere on the same campus. We see MEGAN FUJIYAMA, seated in a motorized wheelchair, heading towards one of the dormitory buildings. MEGAN is an Asian-American student, 19 or 20 years old, and paralyzed from the waist down. She is somewhat overweight, and dressed frumpily in a "Midland University" sweat shirt and sweat pants. She scowls fiercely, radiating contempt and bad attitude. The other students around her react uncomfortably to her presence -- some try to ignore her, others steal glances over their shoulders, others whisper to each other and point at her.
CAPTION (continuing Phantos' thought from the previous page):
"...I WONDER WHAT COULD BE THE CAUSE?"
MEGAN (thought balloon):
THAT'S RIGHT, YOU PEONS... STARE! STARE AT THE FREAK!
PANEL TWO
MEGAN rides in an elevator, along with a couple of other students (including a pretty blonde CHEERLEADER). The others look nervous and try to get as far away from MEGAN as possible in the cramped elevator car, as if afraid to touch her.
MEGAN (thought balloon):
AM I MAKING YOU NERVOUS, BARBIE-DOLL? DON'T WORRY, BEING A CRIPPLE ISN'T CONTAGIOUS!
PANEL THREE
MEGAN wheels into her cramped dorm room. There are books, magazines, clothes, and other junk scattered about.
MEGAN (thought balloon):
I HATE THIS PLACE SO VERY MUCH. AND EVERYONE IN IT. SCREW THEM ALL. I'VE GOT TO GET AWAY.
PANEL FOUR
A close-up of MEGAN as she closes her eyes and concentrates.
MEGAN (thought balloon):
LEAVE THIS WORLD... GO TO MY HAPPY PLACE...
PANEL FIVE
The scene changes to a beautiful Japanese garden, full of blossoming cherry trees and other exotic plants. There is a large pagoda nearby and mountains in the distance. In the center of the garden is a large stone fountain. Sitting on a bench by the fountain, we see a sort of idealized version of MEGAN -- slim, pretty, able-bodied, and dressed in a traditional Japanese kimono. There should be some visual cue to indicate that this scene isn't "real", but rather a sort of illusion that MEGAN is conjuring for herself on the Astral Plane. Perhaps the panel borders could be "wavy" or some other indication.
MEGAN (thought balloon):
...MY HAPPY PLACE...
PAGE THREE
PANEL ONE
The idealized MEGAN looks into the pool of the fountain, admiring her reflection.
MEGAN (thought balloon):
THAT'S MORE LIKE IT.
VOICE FROM OFF-PANEL:
MEGAN FUJIYAMA.
PANEL TWO
MEGAN turns to see TOSHIRO FUJIYAMA standing behind her. TOSHIRO is a handsome young Asian man, and like MEGAN he is dressed in traditional Japanese garb. He also has a samurai sword strapped to his belt.
MEGAN:
(GASP!) WHO ARE YOU? HOW DID YOU...?
TOSHIRO:
I AM LORD TOSHIRO FUJIYAMA. YOUR ANCESTOR, MANY GENERATIONS REMOVED.
PANEL THREE
TOSHIRO sits down next to MEGAN, placing his hand on hers. He's totally flirting with her.
TOSHIRO:
YOU ARE MORE POWERFUL THAN YOU KNOW, MEGAN. YOUR POWER -- AND YOUR ANGER -- HAVE DRAWN MY SPIRIT TO YOU.
MEGAN:
I DON'T UNDERSTAND.
PANEL THREE
TOSHIRO cups MEGAN'S face in his hands.
TOSHIRO:
IN MY TIME, I WAS A POWERFUL WARLORD. BUT LIKE YOU, I WAS UNDERMINED BY PETTY MINDS AND JEALOUS FOOLS. BUT NOW, TOGETHER, WE CAN ACHIEVE WHAT WE BOTH DESIRE.
PANEL FOUR
MEGAN'S face twists into an angry snarl.
MEGAN:
REVENGE!
PANEL FIVE
TOSHIRO leans in to kiss MEGAN. Their lips aren't quite touching yet.
TOSHIRO:
THEN JOIN YOUR POWER TO MINE, MEGAN... AND WE SHALL MAKE THEM PAY.
--
I dunno, some aspects of this story may end up being controversial... not sure how people will react to the handicapped character. But otherwise, it's my usual Silver Age-y adventure yarn. Is it any good? Beats me. But it's DONE. Woo!